Concrete Hope?

I’m not sure as I go on if my stuff will be classed as flash fiction as I seem to have pretty much continued where I left off last week. I had started it slightly different, linking it more directly to last weeks effort but as I wanted to stay true to the ethos of FF I shortened it to 100 words (more or less!!)

Here is this weeks pic: Image

and Madison’s story:


Hope you enjoy this weeks effort:


Drew looked around and as his eyes focused in the dim moonlight streaming from the skylight he’d crashed through he saw the wooden beams and boards barely covering the walls. Drew realised that what he thought was his salvation was just a concrete coffin. He looked closer at the boards on the wall and noticed scratches running down the boards like someone had been trying to get out though the walls.


Then he heard the guttural roar coming from out of the darkness and Drew realised there were no doors, windows or exits where he could make his escape this time. He steadied himself, ready to fight…

15 thoughts on “Concrete Hope?

  1. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Oni,

    Remind me never to visit you.

    Great story, though. 🙂



  2. Lora Mitchell says:

    Hi Oni…I’m claustrophobic so I won’t be visiting you either. LOL. Nice dark, creepy story. Here’s mine:

  3. Sandra says:

    Uh-oh, it’s all going downhill from here I believe. Nice one. I’ll keep my fingers crossed for him. 🙂

  4. Hello Oni,
    A number of my regular contributors do serial flash. As long as you create a moment and tell a story with each scene it qualifies in my book and you’ve done that very well here! Great Job!

    Wakefield Mahon

  5. Gary says:

    I like the difference in this one compared with last week’s. It feels like the same story (which it obviously is) but also manages to almost feel like a separate genre. Kudos, good sir! 🙂

    I’ll link in to mine here too, though it’s nearly 200 words this time around:

  6. Madison Woods says:

    Hmmm. Those scratches up the wall concern me, but perhaps that will also turn out to be the clue for how he escapes? You’ve ratcheted the tension now…we’ll be on edge until next time!

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